Once there was a sweet loving family who lived on a hill all by themselves.
When Toby was at school one day he got called a larry because he lived in the middle of no where. Later that day people started throwing some of there food at him.
As soon as toby got home he told his parents all about it. The next day people started throwing things at his house, he then wished he didn't excised and neither did his family; in a flash all of them were inside stone statues.
They started asking things ''how did we get here?'' ''what brought us here?'' And then toby said it was me im sorry I said I wish we didn't excist and then we came here.''
Good use of a semi colon Oscar - well done! Try to remember to expand those noun phrases to show off your excellent vocabulary too. It's up now and you can comment on others!
Living near the heart of the forest was a girl called Olive.
One sunny afternoon the sky went dark and eerie, shadows came swooping in towards her followed by a swam of giant wasps with red, fiery eyes and dark wings.
“RUN!” Olive shouted to her twin sisters Erin and Lucy. They ran as fast as their legs would carry them, over a stream, across a field, until they came to a village. But it was no use- the wasps had caught up with them…
“Aaaagghh!” Erin cried, “The wasp stings are turning me to stone!” and sure enough her shoes were turning grey and it was spreading upwards fast!
“Oh no me too!” Lucy said hurriedly
“Help!” Olive said, “Why is this happening?”
Well done Rachel - I can really sense your sentence structure and vocabulary choice developing. It's on the 100WC - go and comment on others at 100wc.net and point them towards yours!
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